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Drainingswamps ago

New design:

Design v4 http://dump.bitcheese.net/files/fahahop/1v4.jpg

  • Icons
  • Specialty
  • More space for text
  • Bigger font for the text
  • XP Points (or PP points ?)
  • Score categories need help from native English speaker and reduce them to 4
  • Bigger picture
  • Graphics updated

duhiki ago

Here's my editing suggestions; take them as you will.

Comet Ping Pong (CPP) Pizza restaurant owner; one of the "50 Most Powerful People in DC;" connections to high places including powerful politicians, artists, and lobbyists. Has hosted fundraisers for politicians such as Hillary Clinton. Restaurant doubles as a nighttime party place for all ages and features music by bands such as Sex Stains and Heavy Breathing. Has Instagram account with several images of children associated with money and coded sexual language, such as #chickenlovers. Never officially investigated, never asked pointed questions about his Instagram when interviewed by mainstream media, and so the citizen investigation is huge!

Love the GATA!

Drainingswamps ago

Please polish this one as well

Heavy Breathing

Amanda Kleinman, or 'Majestic Ape' is the lead singer and keyboardist of Comet Ping Pong's main band "Heavy Breathing". Majestic Ape exclusively wears sunglasses, a blonde wig, and a red ski mask during performances and appearances, while singing and talking into a microphone that simulates voice distortion, usage of code words in front of crowds during private meetings, In a video, she says "We can experience the joys of Satan right here in this room without meeting him, Connection to James Achilles Alefantis, Connection to Sasha Lord, deleted her Twitter account,

duhiki ago

Here you go. How does this work?

Heavy Breathing

Amanda Kleinman, or 'Majestic Ape,' is lead singer and keyboardist of Comet Ping Pong's main band, "Heavy Breathing." Kleinman exclusively wears sunglasses, a blonde wig, and a red ski mask when in character. Uses a voice distortion microphone during performances. Uses code words in front of crowds during private meetings, refers to pedophila as a "preference." In one video, she says "We can experience the joys of Satan right here in this room without meeting him." Connected to James Achilles Alefantis and Sasha Lord. Deleted her Twitter account when she discovered she was under citizen investigation.

Drainingswamps ago

Thanks, works perfectly! ...the GOTA is strong with you!

Drainingswamps ago

Card #1 most important card!

Drainingswamps ago

Thanks @duhiki Amazing text very good, This is what is needed, easy to read and understand !!

Will you type few more ?

:) ?

Thanks thanks thanks!

duhiki ago

I'll go through the ones already posted and see what text I can polish for you :) that'll be tonight's project.

Drainingswamps ago

Thanks and very much appreciated

Commoner ago

I liked that you're including the band names. And caught the typo of "never (is) officially investigated"

would "children associated with money, drugs and coded......'?

Love the GATA too.!!

Drainingswamps ago

who comes after Heavy breathing ?

text: Amanda Kleinman, or 'Majestic Ape' is the lead singer and keyboardist of Comet Ping Pong's main band "Heavy Breathing". Majestic Ape exclusively wears sunglasses, a blonde wig, and a red ski mask during performances and appearances, while singing and talking into a microphone that simulates voice distortion, usage of code words in front of crowds during private meetings, In a video, she says "We can experience the joys of Satan right here in this room without meeting him, Connection to James Achilles Alefantis, Connection to Sasha Lord, deleted her Twitter account,

duhiki ago

And it should be expensive pizza, not expansive... well, I mean their menu might be expansive, but their pizza? Eh, not so much.

Drainingswamps ago

Corrected

Thanks