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jonnythaiwongy9 ago

I'd recommend a hook in the first few sentences. The Heavy Breathing performance with references to sex with children, and the IG pics and use of pedo slang in said pics and emails should be at the very top as a hook. If I was the typical lazy fucking mainstream media watching moron, I might stop reading once I see the intro, we need a visceral, disgraceful hook, thats the pics and video.